Part 1 Essays - Writing, Language, Punctuation, Typography

Part 1 My instructor gave several points of feedback. These were things I missed during my read through. The most helpful feedback was that I still had some unintegrated quotes. I don't always catch that when I forget to reorganize my thoughts. With this feedback I was able to organize my words better and fixed several mistakes. Part 2 My peers gave a lot of helpful advice. They warned me about a few spelling errors that spellcheck missed. They also said it seemed rushed in certain spots and some points seemed jumbled together. I am not sure what their names were since I looked all over and was not able to find anything other than 'Student'. They were helpful nonetheless. Part 3 The feedback I got from my instructor about the main focus of paragraph two and it needing to be clearer helped me to take a new look at it. I was able to reorganize and reword it so that it was clearer that teenagers would want to work at McDonald's for friendship. My peers mentioned that paragraph three was missing a clearer explanation of the pathos. Knowing this, I am able to fix it so that it will be easier for anyone to understand. I also will be able to try and get my point across clearer. Rewording and organizing better should fix this problem too. Part 4 My instructor said that I had some unintegrated quotes, needed to put terminal punctuation after the parenthetical of my in-text citations, and needed to read my paper outloud to check if things were unclear. I will be able to reread my paper outloud and check for more mistakes. I can also make sure to put the punctuation in the right places. My peers said I seemed slightly rushed and needed to check for spelling errors. I will be able to double check for all spelling errors myself thanks to that and will also change some of the wording so it flows smoother.